Turtle Love

Pre-revision sentence:

“I would love to have a lovable turtle like my older sister who is an animal lover and loves turtles.”

Me: “You have overused the word “love”. Can you think of some other words you can use instead?”

Post-revision sentence:

“ I would love to have a lovable turtle like my older sister who is an
animal LIKER and loves turtles.”

Me: (on the inside) Three days until break.

At least she didn’t spell it LICKER like the 1st graders always do!